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Ours is not made of roses and candles
Or daydreams dipped in sunset's gold.
Ours is not spun of fairytale's flax
Or starry gazes to fix and hold.

For candlelight flickers and roses wither
And dreams, however sweet, will yield to dawn.

No.

Ours is the unromantic romance.

Sprawling, stubborn, untidy,
Covered in bruises and grass stains.

But
A soft and subtle warmth creeps in,
Slowly,
To temper the rough edges.

We swallow back fear to taste the change;
And with clouts and embraces applied when necessary,
We steer our friendship into deeper waters

For ours is the journey
Comprised of pain and promises,
Tears and joys,
Arguments, denials,
Reluctant realizations, awkward steps,
And a few quiet moments
To drink in the delight of
Knowing another Self.

Ours is the dance
Of blindness becoming sight,
Brokenness being healed,
Strength filling weakness;
Two wills
Entwining together
To be forged, ever stronger, into
One.

And ours is the mountain, firm and forever;
Standing through the storms of Summer
And the snows of Winter,
Taking the beauty,
The glory,
And the hardship
That come with every season.
This was inspired by a poetry prompt I ran across: "Write 20-40 lines about love without using the words love, passion, desire, favor, regard, heart, need, want or longing."

It sounded like a fun challenge, and the prompt fit so perfectly into my idea of a good romance, so I ran with it. I also drew inspiration from (of all things) some of my favorite anime couples; mainly Ed and Winry from Fullmetal Alchemist (LOVE THAT SERIES SO MUCH), and Ichigo and Rukia from Bleach. I love both relationships because this is exactly what they are. "Unromantic romances". I love those kinds. :D
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maximumrideiggy123 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
*choked up* I-i'm gonna cry from general sweetness and harmony... *WAHHHHHHHH!!!!!*

I'm so happy people do poetry like this. It's great.
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aslie Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2010
This is an amazing text Dearie. It is very sweet and so true. It captures all the REAL things of what love is truly like. You are such a talented writer and I am so favoriting this piece of work. :D
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Dearheart42 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2010  Student Writer
Aww, thank you so much Aslie! *warmfuzzies* :hug: Usually I avoid reading or writing love poems whenever possible (most love poetry out there is ridiculously sappy, melodramatic or both), but this one's special to me. So I'm happy you liked it so much. :D
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aslie Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2010
I did; I loved it oh so much. It is my all time favorite love poem now. It hit every spot and every thought. It spoke what I have been trying to write for about nine months now. You are such a talented writer Dearie. :) You can string together emotions and thoughts in just a few sentences. This writing hit me hard because it made me think of all the relationships I see around me and my own. Whether it be friendships or my relationship between Nicholas and I. You have such a way with words. Honestly and truly, you have a natural, God given talent that I am sure He will use to touch many lives through you. :) Thank you for sharing your work on here. I am also in love with your Fanfiction work. Dearie, I am sure God will bless you in so many ways with your writing and many other aspects in your life.

<3 *hugs*
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CaptainNancy Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
This so lovely!
You've taken all the cliches out of love poetry and left just what is beautiful :heart:
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edwardxwinry-3 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2010  Student Digital Artist
Awww... I love it. AND i understand the challenge with that prompt... It makes me want to write a poem too... but I support inoue and ichigo...
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TeithaBee Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2009
Gorgeous, Dearie. Beautiful writing!
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